Hold that Bus

Today’s Poetic Asides prompt was to write a poem beginning with the words, hold that.

Hold that Bus

H…h…hold that bus, please.
I’m running as fast as I can.

H…h…hold that bus, please.
I ran and ran and ran.

H…hold that bus, please.
I’ll catch my breath when I can.

Hold that bus, please.
Thank you, driver, young man.

Oh, no!
I got the wrong bus again.

Sheryl Kay Oder

After looking at this I thought maybe it would sound better without the please. Right now I am not sure, but I figure I should put both versions here.

Hold that Bus

H…h…hold that bus.
I’m running as fast as I can.

H…h…hold that bus.
I ran and ran and ran.

H…hold that bus.
I’ll catch my breath when I can.

Hold that bus.
Thank you, driver, young man.

Oh, no!
I got the wrong bus again.

Sheryl Kay Oder

6 thoughts on “Hold that Bus

  1. Thank you, Misky. What is so funny is I was not sure this poem was worth writing. Then I thought of the last line. 🙂

  2. Thank you, Linda. Someone on Poetic Asides told me without the please it sounds more urgent. That could be true. Also, when short of breath people talk as little as possible, so one more word might be unrealistic.

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s